First portrait bust, improved?

[MattMcK.]

Hello all-
I put a few more hours in on my bust of my grandfather during WWII, attempting to integrate the suggestions eveyone made. He looks better, but there's still a way to go. I haven't yet sanded to smooth the new contours. Any other suggestions for adjustments to help get it right would be great.

There are earlier pictures in one of my previous threads

Thanks for all the help so far!
Matt

 

[ruderogo]

looks real good, much better than i could ever do. one more suggestion as this is a constructive sort of forum; judging by the picture of your grandfather youve made the shoulders of your bust bigger than they should be, but not by alot, im sure if you carved some of it out it would be a little better. keep up the good work!

 

[Manfred]

Matt, much better than before.

A few observations:

The point of the nose needs much more height I would say. There is still "something" off with the right corner of the mouth, maybe not curved up enough?

The eye brows are too high. The mid of the lower lip smoothes more with that grin, so maybe you should reduce it to get a closer likeness.

The ridge the leather jacket collar should be more pronounced (higher) at least on the right side. The collar on the shoulders more narrow. The left of the bust seems to have too much mass, if it was reduced like the right side it would look much better.

The side caps sits at an angle, but I'm not sure if I would change that so far into the project. The rank insignia bars seem a bit too far apart on that.

Please don't treat above observations as patronising or knowitall. Just some observations from someone also doing his baby steps in sculpting. And I get driven home the fact that I don't know anything about it in each modeling session


Edited for schpelling erras

 

[quang]

Hello Matt,

Just caught your posting. Here are my comments if you don't mind.

I think you've done quite well for a first time. Besides a great physical likeness, you've succeeded to capture the psychological facet of the subject, in this precise case, a gentleness in the eyes and the smile. A no mean achievement for a creator of a portrait bust.

There are one or two things that need adjusting IMO.

First the lower lip is always STRETCHED out when one smiles, making it closer (and flatter) against the teeth. Also it 'sinks' deeper at the corners of the mouth. A little sanding will cure it.

Secondly, there's no point (minor interest) in showing so much of the torso. In reducing the torso, you will bring the viewer's attention to the face (which is indeed your TRUE subject).

Not drastic modifications but I think it would benefit an already commendable job.

HTH

Quang

 

[quang]

Oops, ze picture!