Hi,
Doug, Gallardo and Jaime are very good painters with international prestige. Do not worry. The first time I tried to use the Jaime tecnique I must repaint the entire face again.
Really I think each painter has his own technique. You must try in order to find your technique (the one fits you perfectly).
Yes, I also think the eyes are too big. Perhaps you can also try to avoid the "forward glance" . I usually prefer to put the eyes not in center place but a little shifted. It depend of the position of the figure respect the rest of the people (imagine the position of the people). In this figure perhaps you can also try to put their eyes looking the sky (another possibility)
There are too few people that can add all details to 54 mm figures. In the eyes case I usually try to put a black point and another point into it with the final color. This usually is enough. You can also try to put a little white point in each eye, but I usually can't do it in 54 mm. In order to avoid big eyes try to cut away the eyes in the botton with the flesh color you used. Then apply the rest of light and shadows (this change the final results).
I think you are in a good way; do not pretend to be the best (like Doug, Gallardo, Jaime, etc) in the first attempt. I am trying to do it for several years without no luck. Be yourself, experiment and you will suprise with the final results.
Good Luck,
Rafa
I hope you understeand my explanation. (sorry for my english)